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I wrote a paper for my english class, critique it, comment, let me know what I can fix or what else needs to be done.
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I see a bunch of things on first skim..
Gimme a couple. Have some things to take care of |
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Hold mah beer!
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do your own homework, lazy
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Do you want a critique of just grammar\structure or on content?
Is this for a class at Jesus university or at a state school? What is the name of the course? |
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Original Article - http://www.alfiekohn.org/teaching/welleducated.htm
Derf...you start off saying that he wrote 2 articles. Why do I only find reference to one? (One of many problems) |
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Sections in red needs revision are is complete garbage
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At this point, it is no longer worth critiquing your submission because it is apparent that you are putting your brain cells to work on it. |
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